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(80) [2005-05-29 11:13] I feel a little awkward to offer critiques when someone has obviously put a lot of effort into producing an image, particularly when it is one of themselves. The composition and lighting is great, it is interesting that you have decided to crop in very tight rather than providing a slightly larger composition to include the headscarfe. I think the image itself also reflects what you are trying to achieve with your project and focusing on the eyes definitely gives an insight into the soul. Bringing the hand up in front of the face also stengthens the perception of someone who has a strong sense of privacy but watches what is going on around them - but that is as far as I am going with any sort of discussion on content.
Technically, this looks great the only picky aspect is that the edge of the hand and above the left eyebrow is slighlty blown out. Perhaps a half stop less exposure would have retained some tonality in this area - however, it may just be limitations of the scanning process.
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(80) [2005-05-13 23:47] - [workshop] [compare]The composition of the flowers is interesting, however, there are too many technical issues with this picture to make it really stand out.
1/The background is not uniformly illuminated and there is a distracting mark on the right behind the flowers. The grey colour does not complement or enhance the flowers in any way. It may have been better to pick a light blue background, and place it further back so that it is out of focus and doesn't reveal the papers texture.
2/The flowers are strongly back lit, however, this means there is no detail in the flowers. They are neither totally silhouted, nor fully illuminated. Leaving it half and half is perhaps not to clear what was intended.
3/ The bottle doesn't add to the composition. Either it should be cropped out or turned into a feature, choosing either a more interesting angle, or better vase to complement the flowers.
I did a workshop just to play with the image which may give you some post processing ideas that you can use with this type of image.
(80) [2005-05-11 14:53] [+]It's not 'nul', however, by using only one shot of the girl and slicing it there is too much of a superficial artistry to the image. On first regarde it looks good, but it does seem to tire a little quickly. Whilst I still think it is a good image, it would perhaps have more lasting appeal if there were several interspersed/sliced images of the girl to give different aspects as she was passing.
(80) [2005-05-08 17:32] [2] [+]I love the colour and geometry in this picture - certainly brings a certain meditteranean warmth to the spirit.
I would be tempted to crop the picture more tightly to remove the ledge in the lower right corner and the gate in the upper left. Focusing the attention on the centre section with the diagonal lines and curves running through the pictures. The shadow then stands out more and balances the bottom of the railing on the stairs.
Great picture, hope the holiday was as good.
(80) [2005-03-01 13:58] Lovely colours, and wonderful expressions. Its always after the fact, but could do with a little more depth of field.
(80) [2005-02-28 19:06] A well balanced picture with lots of movement. Great composition within the collage and a great sense of event. Even though it is a 'put together' shot it appears quite natural.
(80) [2005-02-28 19:01] This is really nice. I thought that you had completely disappeared from the face of the planet. Good to see you back and posting nice work on the theme of poly-whatsits. Lovely colours.
ciao ciao
(80) [2004-12-07 21:59] [+]Slow sync normally synchronises to fire just before the second curtain closes, if you look at the vapour trails the flash has fired at the end of the vapour trail (just b4 second curtain), rather than start (sync with first curtain).
Anyway, distregarding the above and given I haven't been on TL for ages. I thought I would give this picture of yours a thumbs up...as much because all the other miserables on this site couldn't recognise its merit :-) As much for me it is colour and movement.
Passer un bon noel et neuvos anos.
PS sorry didn't comment on piptychs yet - had look earlier and liked, however, still trying to get my head around the concept.
Very nice photograph with wonderful colours. The only comment to add is that I would have perhaps kept the framing a bit looser (wider). Not much, but just enough to come under her bust on the left and down to the shoulder/hair at the bottom (and perhaps a little more space at the top). At the moment it looks like the model is slipping out of the frame - and, whilst the background has nice colours and is interesting, it is the model that we are mostly interested in.