SMILE

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• HeadlessGuy (2149)
• [2008-11-20 20:00]
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Nice portrait with a big smile.

Good composition with a good pose.

I think the lighting is pretty good. A little flat if you can call it that. Could use more contrasting light and shadow on the right side of the face I think.

I don't think you have to bounce your snooted flash into the ceiling for hairlight. I think it's easier to control if you just should it straight at his hair. If it's to narrow you can shorten the snoot. I've used cereal boxes for snoots but lately I've been using a DIY snoot of black straws which seems to be very effective at controlling the light.

Look like you have a little front focus. His right shoulder is sharp while his left is out of focus. Ideally the focus should be on both his eyes. Did you use auto focus to focus and then compose? Maybe that caused it.

I did a workshop to try and add some overall contrast. The colors are a bit more pale but I think it came out well.
Hope you like it.

Cheers,
Jens

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• boomcat (16869)
• [2008-11-20 22:46]

hehehehe mcm muka bapa dia juga.. besar sudah anak kau ne.. santik ko buat.. yg sa buat tu kelam kabut bah.. cuba ko tingu betul2 ada silap sa..

lucu kali anak ko rasa sbb kau ambi pic dia.. apa pon cantik.. suka sa tengo.. happy sangat itu muka.. good job..

nong

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• trekks (13633)
• [2008-11-20 23:41]

hi Ramdan

How are you doing lately? Your portrait work is going up to light experiment here and it shows a good aspect of photography worth the effort. He is a lovely boy and very happy to be your UNPAID model (normal charge RM75/hour please when he is still not famous yet). To save money, put on a tripod, timer and shoot your self portrait!

The light is a bit less at the top of the head, a touch strong on his left face. But I am happy with this work. After shooting, dont forget to buy him a starbucks coffee.

tfs, bill

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• shelbeesmom (48082)
• [2008-11-21 0:49]

An incredibly handsome DUDE Ramdan! He has a big REAL smile, love how you did this, very good quality shot, excellent lighting and perfect for the theme! Nice job! I'll get you are having to keep the ladies away!
B-)
Linda

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• Royaldevon (16512)
• [2008-11-21 0:56]

Hello Ramdan,

You have learned your lesson well from Rew.
I think this is a great shot.
For me, there is just enough light on the right to outline the face and the soft shadows give lovely contours to the face.
What a warm, engaging smile. I cannot help smiling in response.

Kind regards,
Bev :-)

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• Margy (2512)
• [2008-11-21 1:46]

Hi Ramdan,

That's really a big smile, really a beautiful portrait to me.
Good conribution to the theme.

Best Regards, Marga

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• rigz (1066)
• [2008-11-21 6:32]

Assalamuallaikum Ramdan,

Pertamanya komposisi ini cukup menarik. Contrast antara subject dengan BG cukup berkesan. Superb sharpness and details. Tahniah!

TFS,
Geoffrey Bin Ramji

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• Helkoryo (22130)
• [2008-11-21 8:40]

hello Ramdan

that smile looks like its about to change to fits of giggles. What a lovely portrait, nicely composed and well balanced with good colour saturation too.

TFS and for joining in the theme

kind regards Helen

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• korbee (13637)
• [2008-11-21 11:08]

Making a good portrait needs skill, and you proofed that you have that Ramdan.
jan

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• rewshearer (20962)
• [2008-11-21 11:57]

Well it's not easy setting up portrait lighting - so kudos to you!

I think this works well, your fill light is warm and nicely diffuse, the bounced side lighting works ok too, although perhaps you could move it a little further towards the back so that it doesn't spill so much across his face, and you get a nicer sense of depth?

Hair light is always tough, you just have to keep experimenting with that one, in this instance I think it still needs more light on his hair to separate it from the background.

The focus seems good to me, no problem with the slightly-out-of-focus shoulder.

Keep the shots coming mate - this is good work!

Rew

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• y2kosan (1642)
• [2008-11-21 16:16]

a very nice portrait and you notes is really very helpful on how you came about this composition. i do agree with rew, the left side of the face could have less bounce light. nevertheless, a very contagiuos smile to say the least. reagards to you and your kid. TFS.
y2koSan

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• amai26 (726)
• [2008-11-22 5:14]

Saudara,

Macam muka bapa dia juga bah. Acuan Ranau tatap ada hehehehe...
Pencahayaan yang menarik, pakai slave flash kah? Black BG was great. ECU was good with crisp DOF.

TFS

regards
steve

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• wieyos (8982)
• [2008-11-23 4:18]

menurut tukang tilik, ini anak bila besar nanti inda bulih draip kerita.
kecik-kecik pun baru senyum sudah mau tetutup mata.
bila besar bawa kerita, kawan buat lawak antarabangsa sikit & dia ketawa, matanya tetutup abis & langgar pukuk bunga!

apa di dahinya tu aaa....pottu ka, tambi?

inda payah rasanya aku jadi kakatua pakar-pakar lighting di sini. aku akur ja dgn komen dorang. mimang hebat perlampuannya!

Salam
Agoes

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• tracer (7924)
• [2008-11-24 8:48]

not an expert on this but i say the smile is contagious! very natural.

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