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the ULTIMATE morning blues


the ULTIMATE morning blues
Photo Information
Copyright: Erik Sven (ErikSven) Gold Star Critiquer/Gold Star Workshop Editor/Gold Note Writer [C: 778 W: 114 N: 362] (2299)
Genre: People
Medium: Color
Date Taken: 2008-12-07
Categories: Daily Life, Decisive Moment, Experimental, Mood, Portrait
Camera: Panasonic Lumix DMC-FZ8
Exposure: f/2.8, 1/40 seconds
Details: Tripod: Yes
More Photo Info: [view]
Photo Version: Original Version
Date Submitted: 2009-04-09 10:35
Viewed: 416
Points: 14
[Note Guidelines] Photographer's Note
I’m SURE you know that feeling : waking up after a too short night, having taken that icy shower, but still your eyelids feel like heavy stones.
And the only thing you’ve got to attack the day with, is that crooked comb of yours…
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Je suis SÛR que vous avez déjà vécu ça : vous vous réveillez après une nuit bien trop courte, vous prenez une douche bien glaciale, mais rien n’y fait : vos paupières restent lourdes comme des pierres.
Et vous ne disposez que de ce peigne piteux pour attaquer la journée…
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Ik weet ZEKER dat je dat gevoel kent : wakker worden na een al te korte nacht, een ijskoude douche om het zeer te vergeten, maar niets helpt: je oogleden lijken wel molenstenen.
En je hebt enkel die kreupele kam om de dag mee te lijf te gaan…

PHOTO INFO:
- light source: daylight + ordinary ceiling lamp
- crop
- slight luminosity increase
- contrast increase
- partial desaturation
- resized for TL
- sharpened after resizing
- unsharp mask
- frame added
- grain added (also on the frame)
- © & signature added

Thanks in advance for your critiques, comments and suggestions.
E.

billy-m, Reflex, mvdisco, Urfaust, daisydaisy, karith has marked this note useful
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ThreadThread Starter Messages Updated
To karith: touch of geniusErikSven 1 10-22 10:57
To janneman: Geachte Meerwaardezoeker ;o)ErikSven 2 04-25 02:47
To rewshearer: Food for ThoughtErikSven 2 04-15 00:48
To billy-m: Of course: tired ! ;o)ErikSven 1 04-10 03:23
To pozaru: Unbelievable ...ErikSven 1 04-10 00:59
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  • pozaru Gold Star Critiquer/Gold Star Workshop Editor/Gold Note Writer [C: 3572 W: 737 N: 2406] (19090)
  • [2009-04-09 23:45]
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This is unbelievable ... 60 visitors and not a single word ...
It happens to me too and I can't understand this ...

Ok, first I have to say I'm not sure about the big writing .
Than I'll congratulate you for great noisy impromptu that I can hear almost. Impressive !

my best wishes and Happy Easter !
v

Hi dear Erik,
I'm the one from those 60 :))) But, my reason to not leave comment last night is totally different...I was too tired to write on English (it would be much better on my native,serbian ) ...so I left this comment for morning (ok,it's almost 11am)....but.....In early morning I feel something like you've said in your picture...There is great sentence on Serbian...Da li da se umijem ili da se ubijem ( Something like...Do I wash my self,or kill my self )....and Da li da ustanem ili da odustanem ( Do I get up ,or give up )....

Soooo, you've made , again, great,provoking and so very thoughtful picture...I love it (and it is not because of naked skin ;)))

Warm regards from sunny Belgrade
biljana

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  • Reflex Gold Star Critiquer/Gold Star Workshop Editor/Gold Note Writer [C: 410 W: 280 N: 139] (3174)
  • [2009-04-10 11:21]

Pas mal ce cadrage un peu décalé avec la zone noire à gauche : original et cela donne une ambiance "affiche". Le grain n'est pas trop fort et donne une belle impression de petit matin brumeux (le matin, je vois pas mieux que ça !). "Wake up, stand up" aurait pu aussi être un titre. Quant au peigne, il joue très bien son rôle. Il fait un pied de nez aux insupportables pubs pour les shampoings, et apporte une certaine dérision.
Merci pour ce petit bout d'humanité.
Amicalement
Jean

Ok ... this is a well-put-together shot. The light is beautifully managed, as is the composition, and the pose. The frame is unusual but works well in my opinion, although the copyright message doesn't sit so well.

The added noise/grain is certainly eyecatching.

It doesn't surprise me that there have been so many views and so few comments. Although androgynous from the thumbnail, particularly with the ommitted face of your subject, it becomes evident that this is a male implied nude. The presentation of the shot, however, is more typical of female implied-nude art. The physique of your subject, too, is somewhat asexual.

I won't go into extensive speculation, but if you combine the lack of male figure art in media, the somewhat conservative male-dominated TL patronage, and add a dash of homophobia, the lack of feedback isn't a surprise.

TL is a great place to learn about photography. It generally isn't a great place to experiment outside the norms of sunsets, flowers, insects and pretty girls, as I have learned also.

Kudos for sharing this, you have done well.

Rew

bonjour Erik,

Biljana a déjà tout dit... j'ai bien en plus ce "joli portrait de main,
belle idée ce grain et cet encadrement,


cordialement,

dd

Bonjour Erik,
Jolie composition avec beaucoup de Bruits (Grains)
elle est spéciale et j'aime bien ,belle présentation et détails.. bravo et Joyeuses Pâques
Mes salutations
Michel

Hi Erik..
sensation is perfectly comunicated.. even if it's not pleasant.. your shot has exactly that mood.. well composed and realised!! nice and effective.. many thanks
ciao Marco

Hallo Erik Sven,

Die kam is schitterend :) Het geheel geeft inderdaad dat rottige morgengevoel weer na een nachtje met weinig slaap.

Ik had misschien iets minder ruis toegevoegd - hoewel...je zou kunnen zeggen dat het net dat vervelende gevoel nog versterkt ;-)

Goed omkaderd.

Groetjes,

Nathalie

Ik ga het nog eens proberen Erik ...
het is al lang geleden dat ik nog actief geweest ben.

Ieder uiteraard zijn voorkeur, maar ik vraag me toch af wat de meerwaarde is om bijna 1/4de van het totale plaatje
gewoon zwart te laten. Dat is gewoon zonde.
Voor mij (!) is dat als sexy lingerie ...
overbodig want ik kijk enkel naar het plaatje.
Je subtiele "cpw" had misschien vertikaal gekund ?
De échte foto vind ik echt goed !
Dat korrel-effect is zowat een verwijzing naar
" hallo ik in de spiegel ... en nu zal ik me nog moeten scheren ook zeker ? ... "
Goed gevonden !
Daarom heb ik een baardje :-)

Toch heb ik heb een bedenking.
Geen " but ".
Je ( slag-) schaduw op de muur :
zou ie moeten blijven, verdwijnen of extra in de verf gezet worden of wat ?
Zelf over nagedacht ?
Dat het enkel gefotografeerd werd bij daglicht
en een piere-lichtje aan 't plafond
laat me " stif koed " :-)
Is dat dialect van aan de kust ?

TFS Erik

Jan

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  • karith Gold Star Critiquer/Gold Star Workshop Editor/Gold Note Writer [C: 1067 W: 80 N: 1173] (7423)
  • [2009-10-19 17:59]
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The comb in this shot is a touch of genius. It suggests and organizes the meaning and mood, yet also allows for more to the story. I like the gray and grainy exposure, and the offset presentation is both artistic and classy. Most of all, the idea and the results are profound. One to be very proud of!

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