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• trampas (7051)
• [2009-06-03 14:16]
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hi eleen.
this is not something i would do as i am not the prettiest. ;-)

you have, imho, the beginnings of a very good image.
there seems to be a 'film' dampening your colours making your pic look washed out. the writing is slightly distracting. i have completed a ws to give you my 'take'.
Brian

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• bri (2387)
• [2009-06-03 15:26]

Hi Eleen,
This is a brilliant self portrait, it's hard enough to do without getting the focus spot on and I think you have acheived this. As Brian mentioned it does look a little washed out and the sharper contrast of his ws looks good but the lettering is part of the image and not distracting. TFS
Bri

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• mesquens1 (17439)
• [2009-06-03 16:52]

Olá Eleen,
I like this take, but I agree with Trampas (Brian) on the distracting text.
Very good Portrait.
Greetings
Raimundo

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• rewshearer (20833)
• [2009-06-04 1:18]
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Very cool. Well composed - good use of light. You make such a great model!

Not crazy about the cropped foot though.

Rew

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• trekks (13633)
• [2009-06-04 10:24]

hi Eleen

I am puzzled why you have left space at the top when you could turned up your angle slightly to avoid the crop of foot.

The lighting seems a bit strong on the arms, shirt and the face. Perhaps sharpness may be adjusted a little.

Creative work.

tfs, bill

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• Dingo (11948)
• [2009-06-22 4:25]

Hi Eleen, long time no hear ;o). Good to see some of your work again.
Think Pink... but not much pink in the picture...
I like the light you used, but I think the intensity is a bit too low to bring out the colours; your jacket and your skin appear the same hue in some spots...
Also, I think a bit more separation between backdrop, hair and shoes would be better.
Finally, I consider it a pity that your right foot is out of the frame - it's not as if there isn't enough space...
As always, just my opinion of course.
TFS