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self-portrait
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Copyright: Fourleaf Clover (Tinky) Silver Star Critiquer/Silver Note Writer [C: 10 W: 3 N: 11] (306)
Genre: People
Medium: Black & White
Date Taken: 2008-07-31
Categories: Portrait
Camera: Pentax K100D Super, Pentax SMC DA 18-55mm, 52mm HOYA UV filter
Exposure: f/4, 1/15 seconds
Details: Tripod: Yes
More Photo Info: [view]
Photo Version: Original Version, Workshop
Date Submitted: 2008-07-31 13:32
Viewed: 368
Points: 22
[Note Guidelines] Photographer's Note
"Without you to hold me
And heal my heart
To guide me and keep me
From falling apart
My life is so empty
So hollow and cold
Footsteps and echoes
Of nowhere to go

Without you, without you I know
I'm all alone
I can't go on this way
Day by day
Without you without you I know
I'm all alone
I can't go on this way
Day by day" - Joey Albert

*Just a bit bored, can't think of anything to upload... so why not try myself? All comments, good or bad are welcome. I know there's plenty of noise in the picture, but unfortunately, I'm not really sure how to improve it. It's a bit hard being a model and your own photographer at the same time. LOL!*
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GOOD SELFPORTRAIT!!
You got that noise because you were working with low light, so the black and white was a good idea. Now it looks like film grain...
I like the pose and the expression on your face.

thanks for sharing

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  • karl Gold Star Critiquer/Silver Workshop Editor/Silver Note Writer [C: 113 W: 32 N: 32] (576)
  • [2008-07-31 14:02]
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very nice old style b&w foto !
If you ever could get a roll of Ilford FP4 low grain film, you should give it a try, you may get very nice semitones with it !

I like the pose, the mood, and the light here - it creates a beautiful sense of intimacy.

Ok use of space, I think it could be cropped better to make more powerful composition.

The noise/grain is ok for this nature of shot.

Rew

good start as model! itīs so sad and so cute! i love poem. the noise is a problem, maybe you can try use more ligth in the second session.. letīs go!

Alfredoo

well done
and i like the poem
Karl

Hi Tinky!
You wonderful girl. Original scene. Good capture. Nice self-portrait.
Regards!

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  • shuki (101)
  • [2008-08-07 0:14]

wonderful portrait Tinky,great gray tones,beautifully done,best regards

Hi Tinky!
Beautiful girl. Very interesting scene. Nice capture. Original job.
Cheers!

I think Rew is right about cropping it differently, Maria. For instance a square format would really improve the compo, IMO. The dark part near the right edge, for instance, has no function in the shot.
The grain looks not too bad, with the b&w it creates a certain mood, reminding us of film grain indeed. Now, at f/4 and 1600 ISO you get only 1/15 of a sec? Mmm... some more light would reduce the noise significantly...
SP can be a lot of fuss indeed, but you managed your pose quite well.
I'm out of ws for today, but I'm gonna try something in PS.
TFS

Great picture - well done!!!

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  • jacko Silver Star Critiquer [C: 11 W: 0 N: 2] (111)
  • [2008-10-06 6:26]

galing naman ng self portrait mo. like it!!TFS =)

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