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Elude
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Copyright: Mustafa Shairani (mshairani) Silver Star Critiquer/Silver Note Writer [C: 45 W: 0 N: 33] (120)
Genre: People
Medium: Black & White
Date Taken: 2009-08-21
Categories: Mood, Portrait
Camera: Nikon D 90, Nikkor 18-200 f/3.5-5.6G ED-IF AFS DX VR, 46 mm UV Filter
Exposure: f/7.1, 1/60 seconds
More Photo Info: [view]
Photo Version: Original Version, Workshop
Theme(s): Merc'hed goant/Lovely girls, Friday Theme 2009/8/28 "girls" [view contributor(s)]
Date Submitted: 2009-08-22 22:23
Viewed: 248
Points: 17
[Note Guidelines] Photographer's Note
Another shot of Amber - the 19 year old aspiring model.

This pic is one of the many I took on our first photo session.

I met Amber in a Coffee shop and have a pic of that meeting under the title Amber Debut. During our first meeting our discussion on photography and portraits led to this shoot.

This photo session was supposed to be outdoors in the later hours of the afternoon to utilize the natural soft light but unfortunately we had to cancel it due to rain - typical Scottish weather =)

Anyways we decided not to waste our day n plans and go ahead with the shoot - we did this shoot in Amber's living room - which did not have any descent lighting at all =( I had to play with the camera settings a lot before i could get any NON-blurry pic.

This is the first pic that i processed and am posting here for your comments and critiques.

I look forward to all your advise.
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You were shooting in very difficult conditions, it seems - artificial light?

Composition isn't bad, I would have suggested you raise the camera just a little - less skin at the bottom of the pic and more hair at the top, which would move her eye into the "golden zone."

It would also remove the distraction of where her arm joins her torso, which, although potentially a subject in its own right for a bodyscape abstract, competes with her face as a dynamic structure within the frame.

A little more connection with her eyes would be good, just a slight turn of her head, perhaps?

Did you add the background yourself?

All of my pickiness aside, I do like the mood of this and I think Amber makes a beautiful model, kudos to you both.

Rew

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  • KBE Gold Star Critiquer/Gold Star Workshop Editor/Gold Note Writer [C: 450 W: 103 N: 593] (2739)
  • [2009-08-23 1:28]
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Hello Bro
Another beautiful portrait of Amber u've shared here :)

I like her profile, she very pretty :)

I Agree with Rew about the composition and add that u must have provided more space at the left side of frame.

Good one hope to see more :)

Cheers
Jahanzeib

Bonjour Mustafa

Un bon cadrage serre bien composer pour mettre en valeur ce portrait.
La conversion en sépia et bien adapté a cette image,
Bravo pour ce bon job.
Bonne journée.
Urs

hello mustafa

a nice picture, good pose and composition, nice tones. too bad the model is blured. just a bit more sharp would have been perfect

TFS

Olivier

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  • nicou Gold Star Critiquer/Gold Note Writer [C: 1302 W: 0 N: 2586] (20765)
  • [2009-08-24 2:25]

Hello,

encor un merveillkeux portrait superbe doucuer, quel travail et recherche, la position, cette doucuer, grandiose.

bravo et maitié

Nicou

hey Mustafa
very nice sepia effect , great light and model
best regards
T

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  • milas Gold Star Critiquer/Gold Star Workshop Editor/Gold Note Writer [C: 2733 W: 412 N: 2987] (32833)
  • [2009-08-27 2:08]

merhaba dear Mustafa...
very beautiful shot and detail...A superb colors and portrait...bravo..selamlar

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  • ramon Gold Star Critiquer/Silver Workshop Editor/Gold Note Writer [C: 278 W: 20 N: 710] (3413)
  • [2009-08-28 2:48]

Hi Mustafa,

Interesting portrait...

TFS
Ramon

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  • Fortuna Gold Star Critiquer/Gold Star Workshop Editor/Gold Note Writer [C: 2733 W: 1594 N: 5299] (19241)
  • [2009-09-07 6:57]

Hello Mustafa,

Pretty model and a very good shot!
Excellent light and contrast!
Congratulations and TFS
Sergio

Selam Mustafa
Wonderful capture and portrait
Great pose and composition
Have a nice days
Burak

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