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on train 2 ...


on train 2 ...
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Copyright: Hamed Learner (hamed31568) Gold Star Critiquer/Gold Note Writer [C: 654 W: 1 N: 294] (2437)
Genre: People
Medium: Color
Date Taken: 2006
Categories: Mood
Camera: Sony Cybershot DSC-F717
Photo Version: Original Version, Workshop
Date Submitted: 2008-03-05 4:48
Viewed: 554
Points: 12
[Note Guidelines] Photographer's Note
ok, i know ... let me admit that its not a very strong photo. i can start with 2 major problems myself and maybe you can tell me about the less obvious ones :D
first, you cant see much in the picture. it could have been a much broader one, showing a lot more specially through the train window (but belive me, i couldnt capture more of the area at the time - there was not presetup or posing involved here). and 2, low light, not flash = noisy and unclear picture...
thanks for your instructive comments (from which i learn and try to strengthen my weak points)

in case you are wondering, the ladder goes up to the 4 beds, 2 on each side of the cabin. its fun to sleep up the top. the motion of the train is a very nice way to fall sleep and in the meantime you can look outside the window :)

oh, by the way, this one also belongs to the esfahan trip series, taken on the train at sunrise, somewhere in the middle of the central deserts of iran ... one would enjoy just standing by the window looking deep into the vast desert, lit barely by the sunrise, looking endless ...
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To rewshearer: thanks rewhamed31568 2 03-06 11:52
To joelforte: thanks joelhamed31568 1 03-06 06:55
To ola_kwiatek: hi olahamed31568 1 03-06 06:43
To japiey: many thanks jphamed31568 1 03-06 06:42
To Mujahid-Awais: hihamed31568 1 03-06 06:40
To pozaru: thanks :)hamed31568 2 03-05 05:04
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Hi Hamed!
Nice girl. Original place. Interesting POV. Mysterious lightness. Good capture.
Cheers!

Dear Hamed,

I like this shot..
It has the hidden reality of the day....
You have the best result within the time of capture, and I admire this sincerity.
All the best for you both...
ENJOY LIFE..

jp

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  • Janone Gold Star Critiquer [C: 3409 W: 0 N: 0] (0)
  • [2008-03-05 10:37]

Hello Hamed.
Yeh.. the background souns very familiar to me, haha
Your girlfriend still looks beautiful even with the noisy skin.
The heavy black frame works well in this narrow shot.
Still well done.
Regards from Jan

Beautiful portrait in window light. I change with my taste, please dont mind.

Hi Hamed !


I like it and I've tried another version.
See WS, hope you don't mind.


thanks,
v
ps.I'll be back with points

Hi Hamed
I think the best thing about this photo is the note! Not to take anything away from your lovely model, but the fact that you know exactly what needs to be improved here!

But yes - the composition is a bit messy, especially with the low placement of your subject in the frame - and the fact that the curtain is more sharply focused than her face is a bother, too.

But ... some interesting and unusual elements here. :)

Rew

hi hamed your to kind for admitting your errors, but still i have to say this you have a very beautiful model, i think shes really sexy and has a very attractive face, i hope you could have focus more on her face, still a nice snap shot for me

Would have been much stronger without the paper, plastic glasses and water bottle. Kind of 'old-timey' actually, and save for that might have been shot in the 40's. TFS

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