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poem
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Copyright: Luis Fernando Ortega Carmona (drackness) Gold Star Critiquer/Gold Star Workshop Editor/Gold Note Writer [C: 868 W: 60 N: 615] (3722)
Genre: People
Medium: Black & White
Date Taken: 2006-12-02
Categories: Nature
Camera: FujiFilm FinePix Z1
Photo Version: Original Version, Workshop
Date Submitted: 2006-12-07 5:46
Viewed: 481
Points: 8
[Note Guidelines] Photographer's Note [Spanish]
The day this dress
with a long mantle of solitude,
sadness,
absence,
pain,
memories... of memories...
Locked up between four walls
late and totally in the dark,
I pass me this talking with your letters,
crying to your ghosts,
clearing the memory
to your same memory...
So I am tired
of these pains that single I can ask:
Even when?.
Even when the pain?.
Even when the weeping?.
Even when the sadnesses?.
Even when the love?...
the love...
that small feeling that gets
to stand in the center of the soul,
is watered with affection,
sweet words, details, thousand and things...
Until a day...
It grows as great as the infinite,
every time becomes better,
it is dyed of the most beautiful colors
and blooms within the heart...
He is pretty to seat under his shade,
to be in the shade of the love
seated with you to a side,
having thousand and words
that to say waiting muted
within my soul until seeing
that you wake up to you...
As well as he is pretty to be
under the infinite love,
is sad to see that really
it has finite, that a day...
without saying to us to
nothing the withered love,
the beauty finishes,
the day is finished,
the words are shut up,
the time goes ahead,
the roses are disfigured,
and you so single life mine stop yourself,
you plant a kiss to me
and soon you march,
taking with you my bled soul to you,
my cut yearnings,
my shut up laughter,
my days counted,
my evicted life...

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Hi Luis,
Very nice portrait Photo.Excellent sharp, POV, framing and Exposure.Well B&W compo.Regards.

hAyAti

I like it all the way
Nice setup
Like the blinking cross and pose of the model
Please try a few available light photos with strong shadows
Must be great as well
Ruud

To give you some ideas I made a workshop for you
Hope you like it

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  • valari Gold Star Critiquer/Gold Star Workshop Editor/Gold Note Writer [C: 964 W: 102 N: 395] (4105)
  • [2006-12-07 10:35]

hi,Luis,you really know the magic of the poems...
regards,val

Hi Luis,
Excellent photo in B&W Like the expression of the girl. Nice frame too even like the poem which is excellent my friend!
TFS.
Hans

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