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Valentine's Day


Valentine's Day
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Copyright: Luis Fernando Ortega Carmona (drackness) Gold Star Critiquer/Gold Star Workshop Editor/Gold Note Writer [C: 868 W: 60 N: 615] (3722)
Genre: Places
Medium: Black & White
Date Taken: 2009-02-13
Categories: Portrait
Camera: FujiFilm FinePix Z1
Details: (Fill) Flash: Yes
Photo Version: Original Version
Date Submitted: 2009-02-15 17:45
Viewed: 411
Points: 4
[Note Guidelines] Photographer's Note [Spanish]
Happy Valentine's day, or 14 of February, or day of the love and the friendship… sometimes all the loves are not pretty… some hurt and hurt… and even so… you continue loving…, written of some years ago…

The tears watch your face
leaving tracks of knife on if…
Tears? … Blood? …
is equal…
in the end only you feel
a pain that drowns to you,
you want to shout you suppress
but it, assassins to the quiet
shout with tight fists…
tightened until bleeding…
Not more…
no longer more…
the pain is more and more unbearable,
the air you asphyxia
and you can feel the sopor
of the heat nailing
by each pore of your f**k skin…
You feel that it is going to you to explode
as explode the atomic bomb
in some film that you do not remember,
but you feel that your impure body
it will finish in the same way…
a million pieces and no recognizable one…
your bones…
you forget almost them…
the pain tried to be so etereo
that it only made formal appearance
in the surface of your being…
but your bones begin to become cold,
you bite an arm until arriving
at the bone and you feel
the flavor of the death
impregnated in your lips…
your conscious one every time
is more unconscious…
you fall…
you fall…
you fall…
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hi,

may i ask why the two girls are holding hands in a photo titled valentine's day?

muhammad muhsin

An interesting picture, on many different levels. The composition instantly draws the eye in, with it being angled the viewer is forced to look at what is going on. The inclusion of the reflection in the mirror is a superb touch, whether it was planned or not. Use of black and white sets a mood, and there does seem to be a dark undercurrent, even though the pose looks tender. And with two girls there's an element of the unorthodox. The only criticism I'd say is that the picture lacks a little sharpness.
Altogether I'd say this is a very effective and thought provoking picture - bravo!
Thanks for sharing
Mark

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