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Copyright: John Winder (RhythmThief) Gold Star Critiquer/Gold Note Writer [C: 193 W: 5 N: 216] (1735)
Genre: People
Medium: Color
Date Taken: 2007-08-19
Categories: Friends/Family, Mood
Camera: Panasonic Lumix DMC-FZ7
Exposure: f/3.3, 1/125 seconds
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Photo Version: Original Version
Date Submitted: 2007-08-29 1:35
Viewed: 523
Points: 6
[Note Guidelines] Photographer's Note
Good morning all,
This is another photo of my girlfriend looking through binoculars next to the River Wye. Taken near Monmouth Rowing Club.
I've sharpened it and increased the saturation (I think - I can never remember what I've done by the time I come to upload them!)

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  • Needs Improvement 
  • eMBeer Gold Star Critiquer/Gold Star Workshop Editor/Gold Note Writer [C: 266 W: 58 N: 221] (1420)
  • [2007-08-29 2:10]
  • [2]

Hi John,

I think that this photo is a bit unfortunate... Does not attract too much for several reasons. True, that you placed the girl in strong spot of the picture, but id didn't work here. She's with her back to the viewer. She is dressed in dark and so are the distant trees in the bg as well as most of the water surface. This weakens her significantly as assumed anchoring point of the photo. Another issue is that showing what she's doing you do not show her point of interest - there someting at the edge looking like possible target for her, but it's almost off the frame. Finally there is significant grain on this photo. I think it's due to too strong sharpening. It pops ruthlessly the grain... You used ISO 100 and as I know this type of camera the grain is quite acceptable at this ISO speed. Another problem caused by excessive sharpening is a halo around the dark edges which is too much visible - check the edge of the trees line over the sky and the black poles and bars as well edges of her pants.

I think that changing POV would help a lot. Being you I'd approach much closer and knee down to have her with the sky as background, making her much more distinct and creating in this way the only focal point of this shot. Also would help including in the frame her observation target object.

Marek

Hi John,

I think Marek's critique is very comprehensive and (I hate to say it) correct. I think since you learned to use the sharpening tool you do tend to over do it, be a bit more sparing a bit of softness is sometimes a good thing in a photo. I do think its a good photo of Cam though and a like the background (and her socks)

Cheers
Tom

  • Great 
  • rewind Gold Star Critiquer/Gold Note Writer [C: 114 W: 5 N: 128] (1084)
  • [2007-09-13 11:07]

John, I think Marek's critique says it all, however, with slight changes to POV and less changes in PS there could have been a great photo here. Keep them coming and let me have critiques on mine where appropriate. I have a lot to learn! Cheers, Dad

  • Great 
  • pemi71 Gold Star Critiquer/Silver Workshop Editor/Gold Note Writer [C: 539 W: 13 N: 59] (2621)
  • [2007-10-02 13:13]

Hi John ,
..."Marek's critique is very correct..."
...but moment and story from this photo is very good...,
tfs

Petar

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